Anonymous asked: I’m having a problem when it comes to describing kisses and smiles without using the word lips and still sound natural. Usually, I don’t mind the word, but it seems like I’ve been using it far too often in my writing, especially when it comes to smiles or smirks. Do you have anything to help with that?
Writing smiles and kisses without using the word “lips” is pretty tricky, but it can be done. Just don’t go overboard in trying to avoid using the word. Lips are crucial to both of those actions, so you can’t avoid them entirely. One thing to keep in mind with describing kisses is that lips touching lips or skin isn’t the only thing going on. Hands are roaming, hearts are speed-thumping, and hormones are going crazy–so just spending a little time on what else is going on will both flesh out and lengthen the scene without having to keep describing what the lips are doing. Smiling, at least, gives us a little more to work with. For one thing, there are multiple ways to indicate that someone is smiling:
grinning
beaming
laughing
giggling
chuckling
simpering
sneering
There are also many ways to describe the face of someone who is smiling:
face brightened
face glowing
eyes lit up/sparkled/twinkled
looking delighted/happy/amused/pleased/satisfied
cheeks dimpled
upturned face
And there are ways to describe what the mouth is doing when someone smiles:
mouth upturned
mouth twitched (quick smile)
mouth quirked/quirked up/quirked at the corners
mouth twists with [emotion]
And, instead of smiling, you could describe other visible aspects of the emotion causing them to smile:
doing things with enthusiasm
a bounce in their step, skipping, dancing
swinging arms, tapping feet
showing interest
happy tears
fist-pump, clapping, moving excited
Also, internal aspects that the person smiling might be feeling:
radiating joy
lighthearted
feeling good
being content
(with thanks to The Emotion Thesaurus for help here…) Here are some additional resources for you: Kissing Scenes How to Write a Kissing Scene via letsvvrite Pucker Up! via WriteWorld 5 Steps to Writing the Perfect Kissing Scene via Miss Literati Describing Character Reactions And Emotions: She Smiled, He Frowned
Word count in the HP Series:
Sorcerer’s Stones: 76,944 Chamber of Secrets: 85,141 Prisoner of Azkaban: 107,253 Goblet of Fire: 190,637 Order of the Phoenix: 257,045 Half-Blood Prince: 168,923 Deathly Hallows: 198,227
Word count in the LOTR Series:
The Hobbit: 95,022 Fellowship of the Ring: 177,227 Two Towers: 143,436 Return of the King: 134,462
Fun Fact: Relena’s character design is based on Audrey Hepburn. Her Queen of the World dress later in the series was directly inspired by Hepburn’s costume in Roman Holiday.
infants are so goddamn funny. i was holding my niece today and i just told her “i diagnose you with baby” and she stared at me with the absolute widest eyes like i’d just told her the secret to life itself so i nodded and went “it’s true! you’re just baby” and she stopped for a few seconds, then absolutely YELLED her little head off, very seriously informed me, “ABABABABABAAAAA” and faceplanted into my shoulder, where she promptly began to try to eat my shirt
“I’m BI, I’m HOMELESS, I have A GIANT WAR ROBOT, and I’m NEW IN TOWN.”
— Duo, crashing at Hilde’s place
Priorities.
Duo: So… truth or dare?
Wufei: This is NOT a slumber party!
Duo: It sure LOOKS like a slumber party!
Wufei: We’re being imprisoned on the Lunar Base!
Duo:
Wufei:
Heero: I choose dare.
“Who can remember pain once it’s over? All that remains of it is a shadow, not in the mind even, in the flesh. Pain marks you, but too deep to see.” - Margaret Atwood, The Handmaid’s Tale
With credit to @afro-elf
Duo: I always forget how weirdly numb to horrific things we are.
Quatre: Do you think it affects our souls and the relationships we build with others?
Duo: Oh for sure.
Go away, there's nothing for you here. I ship Duo and Relena and you'll pry my rarepair from my cold dead hands.
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